1st songs

[dissonant]

finished my first songs

any comments appreciated


http://www.nowhereradio.com/rufuskahn/singles


thanks

[TheRealWaldo]

You already made my personal playlist

Only complaint would be the vocals have a bit much effect, and too up front and too high.  (Rope)

Face the world, like it overall, maybe add a bit of verb on the vocals, they are a bit too up front as well, but overall very decent.  The vocals which you've done the phone effect on could be brought up closer to the lead vocals.

thissong - Quite all over the place, almost sounded like timing issues the first few times I listened, there is of course the odd timing issue throughout the song.  Vocal effect again is a bit thick, as with Rope.

head, kick ass  ditch, good an mellow.  At least you are consistent, vocals are too up front and high  It may very well have been what you intended, I think pulling the vocals back a bit and eq'n them a bit lower would help the overall mix.

Rock on!

[dissonant]

thanks for listening TheRealWaldo  

i do tend to go overboard on vocal effects(trying to hide my voice)... im not sure about too high..do you mean the vocal is to trebly? or maybe lacking low end

as far as the timing on thissong its a delay on the drums that my wife begged me to take off but i couldnt resist. looking back i wish i wouldnt have used it on the whole drum kit(machine) instead only on the hihats maybe.. but the drums were already mixed to a stereo pair

im still new to this stuff and i cant seem to get my mixes to transfer well on other systems   maybe its my monitors

you also mention the vocal is too loud i am curious what type of speakers you are listening thru. i hear the same thing thru my small computer speakers but not my monitors


john


p.s.  whats personal playlist?

[TheRealWaldo]

Read about the personal playlist in the 'news' section.

Yeah, the vocals could use a lower eq, or maybe double them up with one eq'd twice as low.

I'm listening through line out on the sound card (flat out) to a tube pre of my own design and an amp of my own design, the monitors I'm using are original Sansui studio prototypes, very accurate reproduction.

When I critique I listen flat, tune everything flat.

[dissonant]

you design your own amps and pres? .. im impressed

i only been recordin for a year or so and a lot of this stuff is new to me.. im shopping for monitors... do you have an opinion of the mackie hr824?

[TheRealWaldo]

In my experience, mackie has always had a good product

I'm not 100% up to snuff on all the 'newest' gear, as I rarely can afford it (and try not to tempt myself), lol, but a good place to ask folk about gear is www.homerecording.com/bbs

If you want to talk about pro gear (the primo expensive stuff), www.recording.org is a good place to sign up for.

[dissonant]

thanks for those links!

[Charvster]

Hi and Welcome to Waldo's World.

Rope: Very catchy melody. I like it but clean up those vocals a bit.

Face The World: Another nice song. With your permission, can I do this at open mic at the local coffee shop? Maybe I'll take a stab at recording it and see how it turns out (not for profit, just fun)

Thisssong: I think as Waldo said, Got to redo the drum track but another good one with some tweaking.

Check out my stuff at,  

www.geocities.com/charvster

Gr8 first efforts!

[TripleM]

Listened to Rope.

Cool as hell guitar riff.  I loved it.

To my ear the vocals didn't need to be brought up, but rather cleaned up.  You could barely tell that there were words being sung.  Were you goofing around with too many toys?  

The bass line is real nice too.  If possible, try to bring that up in the mix.  I think it would compliment the guitar better, and I think you can do it without comprimising other parts of the song.

I really liked the song.

[dissonant]

thanks for listening guys...

i appreciate your suggestions and kind words

charvster - i cant imagine anyone wanting to cover one of my songs but feel free to perform "face the world" if you would like


triplem - my kids are addicted to your song... right now they are running in circles singing  -iamthefoodcourtmanagerdontcrossme...-   i had to download it so they could listen offline

[TripleM]

Hey cool dis...

My five year old does the same thing.  Now if I could just get 18-25 year olds to do that, I might sell a record or two

Either that or try to become the next Raffi...  Oh the horror!!

[dissonant]

ok i have done a remix of rope with less distortion on the vocal.... please tell me if this is any better


http://www.nowhereradio.com/rufuskahn/singles


thank you

[TheRealWaldo]

Sounds better, but there's still some 'fuzz' that's just a little too high on the vocals.  A little compression to knock out the high fuzz possibly?

Or better yet, what about using a phone effect instead of distortion?

W.

[dissonant]

that might be cool waldo how would i get that effect?
just eq everything out above and below a certain freq?

[TheRealWaldo]

Pretty much, not sure what the exact phone frequencies are, but that's what the effect is based on.

W.