Please, critique my songs: Hungarian Girl and Keep On Movinng from CD "Keep On Moving" (pop-rock)
Comments on lyrics, melody, groove, lead vocal,
communication of emotions, would be appreciated.
Hungarian Girl: http://www.atko.dk/realaudio/meta/thenext.m3u
Keep On Movinng: http://www.atko.dk/realaudio/meta/keeponpla.m3u
Album location: http://www.atko.dk/iam.html
Greetings from Denmark
Attila Kovacs
Attila,
I tried a couple of times to listen to your songs but they come through all choppy and very broken up.
I am using a modem but I've had no technical problems with other people's music.
Check it out and when it's fixed I'd be glad to give you some feedback.
Thanks for trying to listen to my music. Hungarian girl is encoded at 128 kbps
So if you have a slow modem it drops out.
Please download the song here: http://www.atko.dk/realaudio/hunggirl.mp3
and open it with your player.
Attila Kovacs
Attila
I've listened to the tune a few times...here's what I think
First of all great recording/production really polished.
Lyrics: I'm presuming English is your second language so well done there. Extremely eloquent even if it's your first language.
I think the words are fine. They are very simple and direct. It tells the story in great detail. I'm presuming the story's true 'cos of all the detail and references. My only problem are the words "Hungarian Girl". Maybe it's just because you have to really rush those four syllables in to that short space of time. I know it's the title of the song and all but it doesn't really work for me.
Emotions: Sincere and direct
Groove: I can't say I've got records quite like this in my collection but I do love when the song goes into that polka section, seems likes it ends and then rises up with some tastey strings.
Vocals: You've a good voice so no porblem there. However I thought you were trying to do too much with those high notes in the chorus. You reach them easy enough (makes me jealous) but I don't know if the song needs them.
Melody: Very happy and bouncey. Had a lot of changes which keeps it interesting. You had more diversity in the music and melody than most people put in 3 songs(certainly me anyway). My favourite was the chord change going into "...the rhythm of..."
You're out of my league Mr. Europop!
Take care!
Thanks for the review. http://media.nowhereradio.com/yabbimages/cool.gif
Attila
Right now I'm trying to strech out the words Hungarian Girl more evenly
in the Chorus. It was a good idea.
Yes the story is true 'cause I've been living in Hungary the first 27 years of my life.
Thanks for the critique!
No problem,
I listened to your new songs as well. "UFO Lady" steals the show. I don't know what else to say about it...except wow! ;)
I wouldn't change a single thing with it but I just wanted to let you know that the first line reads a little strange...did you mean to say "there's a rumour goING around..."
It really doesn't matter when you hear it...just looks strange written down.
I look forward to hearing more,